The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon
The charts illustrate the life cycle of the salmon which is a large fish species.
Overall
, the single life cycle takes nine years to complete including four main stages: eggs, Linking Words
fry
, smolts, and adult salmon. Use synonyms
However
, the first three steps occur in the fresh water and the Linking Words
last
takes place in the sea.
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First,
the adult salmon are laid their eggs among small stones at the base of reeds in the upper river where the current is slowly moving. Linking Words
Then
, the Linking Words
fry
can be seen after five to six months approximately and they are 3-8 cm long. Use synonyms
Next,
these Linking Words
fry
swim to the lower river which has fast flowing current and Use synonyms
fry
take 4 years period to become Use synonyms
smolt
. The Use synonyms
smolt
measure 12-15 cm roughly.
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Finally
, Linking Words
smolt
heads to the open sea and they have grown into adult Use synonyms
smolt
70-76 cm long when taking 5 years approximately. After that, when they reach spawning. they swim to the river and the life cycle repeats all over again.Use synonyms
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