The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon
The charts illustrate the life cycle of the salmon which is a large fish species.
Overall
, the single life cycle takes nine years to complete including four main stages: eggs, fry
, smolts, and adult salmon. However
, the first three steps occur in the fresh water and the last
takes place in the sea.
First,
the adult salmon are laid their eggs among small stones at the base of reeds in the upper river where the current is slowly moving. Then
, the fry
can be seen after five to six months approximately and they are 3-8 cm long. Next,
these fry
swim to the lower river which has fast flowing current and fry
take 4 years period to become smolt
. The smolt
measure 12-15 cm roughly.
Finally
, smolt
heads to the open sea and they have grown into adult smolt
70-76 cm long when taking 5 years approximately. After that, when they reach spawning. they swim to the river and the life cycle repeats all over again.Submitted by shanikamaduri on
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