Nowadays, technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

The usage of technology has been growing significantly these past years. Now some governments are using it to check what people are doing or what they say on their phones, sometimes even without them knowing that they are being monitored. In my opinion, the benefits of technology outweigh the drawback. On the one hand, many people get stressed by the idea that they are being watched since

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they prefer to keep their life private.

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, recorded data might be hacked and used for crimes or fraud

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as cases in which a hacker uses the saved data to get a credit card number. If the recorded data is not well-protected, it might cause disastrous damage.

On the other hand

, the main objective of monitoring devices is to protect the public. In the case of crimes, monitoring devices will be of great assistance to the police so they can catch

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criminals quickly.

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, new GPS devices that are programmed to specify the location of stolen cars can save a lot of time and harm. The process of monitoring help to decrease the

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rates and promotes justice in society by providing the sheer truth. Even though many people might want their lives to be confidential, many would rather

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privacy.

To conclude

, we all tend to keep ourselves and our families secure.

Thus

, we need to be more flexible with the fact that we are being monitored and appreciate the technological developments that are making our life much easier and safer.