More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of  fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, obesity has turned into a big problem. Some
people
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believe that it is a result of consuming junk
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, they believe the main solution to address it, is raising the price of these
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. I tend to think it is not enough to deal with
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problem. The main reason for obesity is the wrong lifestyle and diet. The prevalence of technology has driven
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to be less active than before. Individuals spend most of their time sitting on the couch using their mobile phones or their laptops. They can do their shopping or banking transactions at home.
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, they should find new ways to burn calories,
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as exercising or walking to work.
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, most
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cram a huge amount of tasks in one day, so they do not have time to cook and eat healthy food at home. In
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circumstances, an increase in the price of fast food is not the best possible way because many
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can afford it. The better way is that cafes and restaurants offer a vast variety of healthy
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, like, different salads or sea
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. It would encourage
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to choose them. Here, Media has a crucial role to make
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aware of the consequences of consuming oily and sweet meals on physical health. All in all, there are a lot of reasons that make
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overwhelmed. From my perspective increasing the price of fattening
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is not effective enough. Adopting a healthy diet with no sugar and oil and doing exercise on a regular basis is the best way.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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