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Band 7

People are never satisfied and always want more. In what ways is this a good thing and in what ways is this a bad thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the materialistic world of today, wants are unlimited. To satisfy themselves, individuals these days have huge desires, which, on
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 hand, is appreciated because it keeps them going,
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, unrealistic needs can never bring satisfaction to a person.
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, the person remains unhappy and dull, which could even ruin his growth. In my view, wants should be limited and realistic, so that the individual is content. First and foremost, there is no end to our demands. When
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 wish gets fulfilled, the next follows it, probably even more challenging. Our needs are ever-growing and have no end.
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 the contagious disease of showing off, peer pressure and modern lifestyle expectations.
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 process to accomplish every small and big desire is tiresome but we still try to put in our best. During
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 accomplishment, we tend to lose our precious family time, compromise our health and even undergo stress.
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 is certainly not beneficial and poses a threat to our living.
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, my brother, aged 42
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, is always on the go to chase his incessant demands. He always wanted to have his own house.He worked hard for
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, and
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 achieved
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 milestone. It has been only 2
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 new dwelling,
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, he now wants to buy another bigger
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 as his close friend did the same recently.
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, the wants are limitless and
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 needs to hold himself tight to have a holistic approach
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 of a big house.
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, some people feel that their dreams are the motivation to work hard and achieve success in
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. Without wants, there is nothing ahead to look into and
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 becomes dull and boring. To keep the ball rolling, realistic and time-bound goals are important to sail through the journey of
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. Take an example of a student, who wants to learn more and more
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 desire requires him to put his heart and soul so that it can be fulfilled.
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 is, without a doubt,a positive aspect. In conclusion, it is important to have a purpose to live.
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, we should not chase unlimited needs. In fact, we should lead a satisfactory and fulfilling
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 and learn to be content with whatever
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 possess. Other aspects of
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 as family, health, and vacation, are vital too, to live happily. Having unnecessary stress only reduces our
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Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and supported with sufficient examples and explanations. Some points, while valid, could be explored in more depth.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a clear logical flow between your paragraphs. Each paragraph should transition smoothly into the next.
coherence and cohesion
Review your grammar and sentence structure; there are small inaccuracies that could be polished for a more formal tone, such as ensuring correct punctuation and word forms.
task achievement
You present a balanced discussion by addressing both the positive and negative aspects of wanting more.
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Your examples illustrate your points effectively and add depth to your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, body structure, and conclusion, guiding the reader through your thought process.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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