In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

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it has so
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advantages. First of
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you can get rest after your whole 12 years of education
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you can clear your mind for
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and you can go to some volunteering mission that
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from your main language, it builds confidence and reduces social anxiety for your
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you can work much more for your branch and that gets you much
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ahead of your classmates when you'
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or
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they want to do with their carrier without
university
stress.
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of people
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know what they'
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going to build their carrier about and that
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huge chance too because they can find in
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their passion or whatever they need for the build their
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carrier
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my experiences,
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while I
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. That gave
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ahead of my life, carrier and for my t business.
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think there's no disadvantage
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taking a
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except for one thing you'
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be a problem if you'
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but if you can build yourself it's not even a problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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