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Today,there is less communication between family members than in the past,what has caused this? do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The
fact
 that less
communication
 between family
members
 than in the past is becoming more widespread among many people these days.
This
 essay will examine the causes of
this
 tendency and,
personally
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 I can neither completely think it is a positive nor negative development for a variety of reasons. There are a variety of different causes for
this
 matter.
To begin
 ,with some
parents
 are often busy with their work and
children
also
 have some problems with them. In
fact
, almost
parents
 work 8 hours a day and they go back home tired and stressed,
therefore
 they need
time
 for rest and relaxation.
Besides
,
children
 have a lot of homework they have to finish. Both
parents
 and
children
 don'
t
 have leisure
time
 to talk or share with each. I believe that less
communication
 between family
members
 than in the past both positive and negative. On the one hand, everyone can spend their
time
 relaxing, preparing energy for the next day working or learning.
For example
, in the
last
 month, my family tested when we don'
t
 spend
time
 talking together will have what is different, so amazing, my parent and I have a lot of
time
 to play sports, listen to music and study a new language.
On the other hand
, I believe that less
communication
 between family
members
 than in the past is negative.
Firstly
, when family
members
 do not communicate together, they can'
t
 understand deep about each person, and
this
 is lead to some problems. In
fact
, when
parents
 don'
t
 talk with their
children
, they can'
t
 know about the situation study of their
children
 and sometimes they difficult to share about themself. In conclusion, the
fact
 that less
communication
 between family
members
 than in the past is a big problem that affects a lot of people nowadays. It's mainly caused by they have to work and study
therefore
 they don'
t
 have
time
 to talk.
Although
 less
communication
 between family
members
 has some positive. I'm convinced that family
members
 should talk and share with the family closer.
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