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many countries spend too much money on training of a few individuals for international sports competition. Some people believe that government should spend more in ordinary people instead. Do you agree r disagree? give your opinion and example

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There are some who believe that the
government
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 should not spend too much
money
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 on
athletes
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 to compete in international sports
while
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 others think that the
government
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 should spend
this
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money
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 on ordinary individuals. I completely agree that the
country
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's
government
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 should allocate a great amount of
money
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 to training these
athletes
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 rather than ordinary citizens.
To begin
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 with, the main reason why I fully agree that the
government
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 should spend a
considersable
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considerable
 amount of
money
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 on
athletes
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' training programs is the
country
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's prosperity.To illustrate
this
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 point, competitive sports nowadays are considered a part of the
country
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's success with other
nations
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, and without putting much effort into drilling the
athletes
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, the
country
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 might not have a good relationship.
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, some of the undeveloped
nations
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 now are unwilling to invest in training sportsmen internationally to participate in sports competitions, and
thus
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 the
country
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 cannot build a relationship with other
nations
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 which might lead the other
nations
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 to unsupporting them when needed.
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, being an unsuccessful
country
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 means they cannot cooperate with other
nations
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.
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 to the previous point, the second reason why I am with the
government
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 investing too much
money
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 in
athletes
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 is
due to
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 boost the economy. If the
government
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 well-trained these
athletes
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 to be professionals and elite,
this
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 might contribute to the
country
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's economy by obtaining
money
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 for each win.
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, if participating in the World Cup and winning one of the matches
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 the trained players, the
country
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 will be rewarded with
money
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 for
this
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 win. In conclusion, I am in strong agreement that the
country
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 should invest a considerable amount of
money
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 in training players to compete internationally, as
this
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 will have a profound impact on the
country
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's prosperity and improve the economy.

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