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Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

News
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 happens everywhere and it’s vital to know what’s going on locally, nationally, and even globally. Still, there is debate about whether international
news
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 should be included in schools. One side supports
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 initiative
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 the other doesn’t.
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, since
events
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 on one side of the globe can impact people on the other side, it would be best to include global
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 in the classroom. In support of including global
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 for
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, there are several reasons. The first is that any event can have a global impact and offer unique learning opportunities.
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, the tsunami that destroyed the nuclear power plant in Fukushima, Japan was an important incident that still has a global impact as the irradiated waters are still flowing in the Pacific Ocean. By teaching about
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 event,
students
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 can learn many things,
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 as the risks of nuclear energy and geology in how tsunamis are formed. Another aspect of teaching
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 is that
children
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 become more aware of the
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 and learn about different cultures.
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 can lead to discussions about these cultures and can lead
students
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 in becoming more tolerant and accepting of those who are from different cultures and backgrounds. There are those who believe that international
news
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 should not be taught. One reason for
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 is the claim that learning the three important skills – reading, writing, and arithmetic – are more important and should be the sole focus of
children
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’s learning.
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, they may contend that
children
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 should learn more about what goes on in their own communities and that they should learn about their own culture and heritage first. The idea is before a child can appreciate another culture, they must first come to appreciate their own. Even so,
children
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 can learn to appreciate their own culture
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 learning about
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 ensures that
children
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 become more tolerant at a younger age,
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 older
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 and adolescents who have not learned about
others
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 may face difficulties in accepting them. By including international
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,
children
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 can learn about
others
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 in the
world
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but
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 learn from the
events
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 that happen. From
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, they can discuss the causes of problems that led to these
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 and even come up with solutions.
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, these
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 could be precursors to
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 learning
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 as when large-scale solar storms bombard the Earth,
students
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 can learn more about the sun. We should all be aware of what’s going on in the
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 and international
news
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 can help us to understand the various issues that affect our lives.
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 is equally true for
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 as well. Being exposed to
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news
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 and using it as a platform for learning can enhance a child’s understanding of the
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while
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 helping to make him or her more tolerant and understanding of
others
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global perspective
  • world events
  • analyze
  • viewpoints
  • curriculum
  • cross-cultural communication
  • foundational skills
  • misinformation
  • biased views
  • resources
  • trained teachers
  • educational settings
  • critical thinking
  • overloaded curriculum
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