In the recent years, television has contributed the most to changing people’s quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the
last
few years, the lifestyle of humans has changed because of
Television
. Some individuals have a positive view of
this
effect, and some have a negative view related to how
Television
made that change. I agree that
Television
has a great impact on society.
To begin
with,
Television
has been invented at the beginning of
twenty-first
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century, and after
that
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all people’s
life
changed. It’s made our
life
like a small village.
For example
, if any news or
events
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event
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happened, society knows about it from
Television
. In Iraq when the War accrued, communication between cities had been stopped, and no one could know anything, because of that all people watched
Television
. When nations had the
Television
, they started to learn about other nations their culture, language, food, and nature.
In addition
, it became easy and flexible to learn a new language or new skills. One of the best examples of learning English is watching series like Friends or listening to American music
,
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so that it will improve the ability to talk and understand the new language.
Also
learning new skills like time management and leadership could happen by following programs
talks
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about these skills. In conclusion, I believe that
Television
changed the quality of people’s
life
, by adding
flavor
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to their
life
like
made
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one family
sitting
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sit
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together to watch a family movie or program.
Television
had a great impact on nations by introducing their culture to each other.
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