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The crime rate has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions to this problem

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There are significant increases in
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 rates in many nations. Lacking
of
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fundamental
education
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 and the problem of accessing
job
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opportunities
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 are the main cause of
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 issue. Not only government must tackle
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 problem, but
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individuals
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 in societies. On the one hand, The main reason leading to
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issue
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 is the lacking of fundamental and effective
education
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 because if
citizens
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 can not access
education
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 resources, they may lack sufficient knowledge to gain
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 in
workplace
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.
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, Lacking
job
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opportunities
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 lead to money problems. When
individuals
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 can not afford to pay their life expenses in order to provide their food or houses, It can lead to
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 problems
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 theft and murder to steal someone else’s property. On the one hand, to tackle these issues authorities should provide their people in terms of accessing equally free
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 to share the right knowledge
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 they were born to finish high school ,and they should help their
citizens
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 by providing some subsidize to people who can not afford
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opportunities
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 ,and they may provide some courses to
job
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 seeker to learn new useful skills or programs to gain chances when they need to find a
job
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.
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, the government should announce regulations or laws.
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, authorities should increase
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 punishment to control their
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.
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,
individuals
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 should keep an eye on situations to prevent the
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 rate in their nations. In conclusion, the
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 rate that increasing in many countries
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 by a lack of
education
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 and
job
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opportunities
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. Governments should provide fundamental
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 without paying ,and more
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 options to their
citizens
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also
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,
individuals
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 can help in terms of caution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dramatic increase
  • economic factors
  • social inequalities
  • educational opportunities
  • glamorization
  • family structures
  • community bonds
  • proliferation
  • organized crime
  • ineffective law enforcement
  • judicial systems
  • impunity
  • job creation
  • vocational training
  • resilience
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • media campaigns
  • preventative measures
  • deterrent
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