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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In Several nations in the world,humans are leaving their villages and moving to towns
as a result
 the number of
people
 will drop ,ln my opinion
this
 should be seen as a is positive development because first education , and research always about learning better,the second employees and
transport
 and close work ,third hospital and care great .
On the other hand
,they are a lot of families who are researching excellent education for their children in the city there development of teachers
in addition
, to using new ways
moreover
 to provide environment health and help kids creative,on the medical side provides a huge percentage of medicine with more of great doctors ,if we do not have any develop in hospital,it will become life disasters for children ,
for example
,a recent study found many obstacles in education in the countryside because a lack in tools the study like computer and devices learning .
On the other hand
,there are relationships between employees and
transport
 major individuals who work in places far suffering from lower
transport
 like trains,buses,taxis Always were exhausted and complained about
this
 phenomenon so they decided to rent a flat and leave their homes today found cases of
people
 of distance do not create in their work with crease drinking coffee which impacts their health.
For example
,show a report in a newspaper bcc about
people
 addicted to the coffee and majority of humans have obstacles with
transport
. In conclusion,it a result,
although
people
 moving from their areas to cities
however
 not denying there are many benefits for humans ,in my view it is optimistic development because of stability and comfortable .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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