The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
This
line chart compares the citizenary
in four Asian countries which are, Malaysia, Philippines, Correct your spelling
citizenry
Thailand
and Indonesia
during the time period from 1970 to 2040.
It is clear that
,
the proportion of Remove the comma
apply
city
population in Malaysia is the highest among all. Malaysia and Correct article usage
the city
Indonesia
show the same pattern in growing of
the percentage of Change preposition
apply
population
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the population
while
increasing
style of Correct article usage
the increasing
Philippines
and Correct article usage
the Philippines
Thailand
is same
.
In 1970 Indonesian cities had the lowest number of citizens, Correct article usage
the same
whereas
in 2040 it will have the second most population. Moreover
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,Moreover
Thailand
city populace showed Change noun form
Thailand's
upward
trend until 1990 and it started to increase gradually from 1990 to 2020, Correct article usage
an upward
while
it will predicted
to rise in Change the verb form
be predicted
predict
next
20 years.
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the next
According to
this
figure, in 2010 Philippines and Indonesia
had the same amout
of city Correct your spelling
amount
resident
at 40%. Fix the agreement mistake
residents
Although
the proportion was all the same between Indonesia
and Thailand
which was 28% in 2010. Totally, percentage
of the number of people in every Correct article usage
the percentage
cities
that Change to a singular noun
city
given
, will predict to increase in futureAdd a missing verb
is given
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