It is imortant for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Getting out of your safety zone and facing risks is
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necessary
for individuals in different aspects of their
life
, including personal and professional aspects. As far as I know, the benefits of taking risks
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the drawbacks
therefore
, in
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essay I will discuss my point of view.
To begin
with, I think staying in
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zone has numerous drawbacks.
For example
, if one does not take
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risks
risk
in their career the potential opportunities for improvement and success will be missed.
Also
, avoiding
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new
occassions
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occasions
may deprive a person of experiencing new ways of living
an
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joyful situations. The major disadvantage of avoiding
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risks
,
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is being deprived of new opportunities which may bring happiness and success to
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life
.
On the other hand
, trying new opportunities has a great impact on
personal
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and professional success of individuals. Trying new things
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people deal with unexpected challenges which
helps
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to broaden their
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horizons
,
in
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this
approach helps people to learn new things about their career or their private
life
so they can handle different
challeges
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challenges
in a better way and with more experiences. Taking
riskd
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risks
risk
can provide individuals with more
self-steem
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self-esteem
and satisfaction in all of their
life
aspects because it shows them different ways to live a better
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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