Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

An array of
people
assume that
children
should be taught how to be one of the good members of
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,
while
others consider that
school
is the best place to learn
this
.
To begin
with, brood is the first community that
infant
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sees. Everything begins
from
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family,
therefore
folks teach
children
everything they need in life. Plus, they learn how to behave decently.
However
,
parents
taught these things, it would not be
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if they teach toddlers to become nice members of society, when they grow up, they will be clever and educated
people
, whose
parents
paid attention to their
future
.
In addition
, when they become adults, they will see
people
who
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not educated as them, and whose horizon is not broad
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their
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. There is more potential that
person
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will compare and differentiate, what is good and what is bad. When they see
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, they will have more opportunities to teach their own
children
like their
parents
taught them before.
On the other hand
,
children
can receive good
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in
school
, but they can not get
attention
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the attention
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from teachers
as
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their
parents
give them. Even if one of the
parents
say
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that
children
will obtain education from
school
and other necessary skills, he would be neglected to his
children
's
future
.
However
, we should look on the bright side of
this
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between
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thought
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of
people
. In that case,
children
will meet
first
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circle of friends in
school
, but it does not mean that friends are leading them to
the
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bright
future
. It depends on
child
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the child
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,
which
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company he will choose. As I said, if
kid
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the kid
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is educated he will choose
right
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path to his
future
and
right
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friends who will lead to
this
future
. If
child
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the child
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was neglected by his
parents
, there will be vice versa. But, when it comes to me, I prefer
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version, I mean to teach
children
from their childhood and by their
parents
. It is obvious, why I chose
this
version, because there
is
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almost no drawbacks. And our community and country will be more productive that way. I have seen the results of both versions.
For instance
,
while
I was studying at
school
, I had classmates whose family was hoping that
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children
will learn skills and be
beneficial
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person to society. But their
children
became apathetic to their own
future
as their
parents
did it long ago. I am afraid even thinking about who will be their own
children
, because when I asked them that Do they want their
children
become
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people
like them, they replied “
yes
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, of course, I will be proud if my child will be
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like me. “ In conclusion, I will never change my mind, and be
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of
multitude
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a multitude
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of men who
thinks
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that
children
should learn
necessary
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skills and how to turn into one of the greatest participants of association from their brood.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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