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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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The three pie graphs illustrate the alters in annual expenditure by a specific United Kingdom
school
 during three years namely, 1981,1991, and 2001.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 during given the
school
 spending highest among
of
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apply
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their budget in
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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 wages,
while
spneding
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spending
speeding
 on insurance was
least
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the least
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.
Furthermore
, all spending categories showed fluctuations over
given
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a given
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 period except insurance and other
workers
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workers'
worker's
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 salaries showed
increased
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increases
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 and declined, respectively. Looking at pie
chars
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charts
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 in more detail, we can see during
given
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a given
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 period
school
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schools
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 expenditures
highest
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the highest
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 amount of
of
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apply
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their money. To
illusrate
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illustrate
 in 1981,1991,
2001
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and 2001
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range
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the range
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 of spending
in
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on
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teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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 salaries was from 40 to 50 %.
In contrast
, insurance received
least
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the least
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amont
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amount
 of spending
of
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on
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school
 from 2 to 8%. Regarding
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the others
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others
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other
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 categories, other
workers
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workers'
worker's
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 salaries showed
decreased
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decrease
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 over
given
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a given
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 period from 28 to 15 %. Furniture and equipment from 1981 to 1991 showed went down from 15 to 5 % ,and after
that
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,that
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 it showed raised from 9 to 23% per cent.
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  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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