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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible, while others argue that it has had a very negative impact. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Air travelling is a popular kind of travelling at present. Commercialization of air
travel
 make a new period of the travelling industry. It helps
people
travel
 far places easier, so
people
 can go from one country to another easily.
However
, some others think that
this
 kind of
travel
 may have lots of dangerous because the safe of the
plane
 is not guaranteed. In my opinion, the aeronautics industry brings many benefits to
people
 today. On the one hand, the proponents of using the
plane
 to
travel
 think that it has many advantages.
People
 can take place to place faster than other kinds of transport when travelling to far places in an easy way.
For example
, if you go from Ho Chi Minh City to Hanoi by train, it will take almost a day, it can even take several weeks if you go by car, and if you go by
plane
, it only takes about 1 hour, a significantly different. Another case is if you go from America to Asia by water it can take months, but it only takes about 1 day if you go by
plane
.
On the other hand
, the opponents of air
travel
 assume it will bring harm. They have
this
 opinion as well because flying is very dangerous, it can go fast but it is
also
 very unsafe because when flying, birds can fly into the engine and make them explode or when flying over When it rains, lightning can strike the
plane
 causing it to lose control and fall to the ground.
However
, these negative impacts have now been minimized by the operators,
such
 bad cases almost do not appear anymore. Today's planes can fly very high, well beyond the range of birds, and when the weather is bad, the
plane
 will not take off to reduce the total risk.
This
 proves that today's aircraft industry brings a lot of benefits to
people
 and the disadvantages have
also
 been overcome to bring about the most positive results.
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