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countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy some product anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive of negative develolment?

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Nowadays , most of the products from different parts of the
world
 are available in every corner of the
world
.
Also
, it is undeniable, that almost all goods are available in all
countries
, which is
one
 of the most challenging issues in the Western
world
, as
this
 subject has some pros and cons , I can not say that it is completely good or completely bad,
therefore
,I will write an article about both advantages and disadvantages of the presence of stuff in the modern
world
. On
one
 side, it can be helpful, because it can be the reason for industrialized
countries
.
For example
, numerous studies by oxfords university in Tehran showed that it can cause an increase in supply, and for growth , supply we should have more factories.As result, the Problem of lack of Jobs in some
countries
such
 as China and India could be solved. On another side,
it is clear that
 no country can provide all of its demands,
consequently
, they can benefit by sharing equipment with each other.
For instance
, imagine two
countries
 ,first
one
 has
gasoline
 but no
loader
 factory and for derive
gasoline
 needs some
loader
 and the second
one
 has a
loader
 company but no
gasoline
 and for
loader
 production needs
gasoline
, so they would prepare the requirements if they exchanged
gasoline
 and
loader
.
However
, it should not be forgotten that availability of the same products all over the
world
 is leading to destroy a culture.
For example
 , 50 years ago, Indian people used to wear their local dress , but in modern times they getting used to putting on Western clothes
such
 as Nike and Adidas. In conclusion, in my opinion,
this
 topic can have an ill and suitable impact on Peopleโ€™s lives.
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