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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps compare the plans of a public
park
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 in 1920 and now.
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, the
park
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 experienced a reduction in the green areas, and there are fewer sitting places for people now, compared to 1920. If we look at the north-eastern
side
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 of the maps, it is evident that the rose garden has turned into a cafe,
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 the pond for water plants has been converted into a children's play area. On the eastern
side
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 of the
park
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, the seats have been removed to make way for a new entrance. The glasshouse on the southeastern
side
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 has turned into a water feature. Moving forward, the central fountain has been turned down and replaced by a rose garden and sitting areas. Another significant change is that there used to be a stage for musicians on the western
side
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 of the
park
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, which is now replaced by an amphitheatre for concerts. A rose garden on the southwestern
side
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 of the
park
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 has
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 been abolished during the period in question.
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