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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom

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Nowadays, the majority of people prefer to use modern technology gadgets
while
 working.
Also
, in many fields
computers
 started replacing human beings.
Due to
this
 reason, some people think that after some time AI will completely replace
teachers
, too. But I completely oppose
this
 idea because AI will not be able to change the
way
 they teach each student
according to
 their abilities
,
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 or build
an
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emotional support. First and foremost, every child has different abilities and tendencies in education. That's
way
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teachers
 have to modify the
way
 they teach with each student. But the
computers
 will not be able to do that. and
this
 will eventually lead to that AI will not be able to control a class
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full of students. As an example, sometimes younger
teachers
 who do not have experience, fail to control the class. In spite of these disadvantages,
computers
 do have some advantages,
such
 as studying remotely and so on. One of the biggest advantages of AI technology is the fact that children would be able to study remotely. In my opinion, it is quite important and convenient not to spend hours going to school and returning from there But some students are not able to study remotely because of it their test and exam results will be lower, too.
To sum up
, I agree with the idea that some students are capable to study with the help of AI, but others
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will influence in a negative
way
. That's why I do not think that
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computers
 will completely replace
teachers
.
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