Indeed, government should impose heavy taxes on private car owners in order to improve public transportation.

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There are numerous factors contributing towards it that solve traffic issues. Nowadays every private car
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owners
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wants to travel by own
transport
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creating a jigsaw puzzle all around. The congested roads with heavy traffic
disturbs
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a
person
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mental health.
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with plenty of benefits, it would allow people to reach destinations
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less time than usual ultimately saving time as time is money.
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fuel prices are already cloud nine
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increasing inflation at high rates. Public
transport
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will enable individuals to save money by less fuel consumption.
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, few cars on
road
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means
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less number of accidents.
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public
transport
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creates a large amount of revenue being an economical source of a country. More people will prefer public vehicles so more money can be generated. Recently
Pakistan
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mass transit authority launched
metro
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bus project .The government generated huge income that encouraged
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to promote
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.
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, it grants numerous disadvantages .When govt will
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imposing
tax
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burden
every
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private car
owners
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will stop buying vehicles .
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particular industry will get adversely affected.
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, various contagious diseases might spread if
patient
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travel in public
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.
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it will turn out to be a great mess.
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transport
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do
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consider every terminal
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passengers but every person
do
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not
gets
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benefited
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remote areas
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of stations.
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but not least public
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is not safe too. I do not agree
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the notion that govt should impose heavy taxes on private
transport
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.Though public
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should be provided to the non-affording community.
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private cars should be encouraged simultaneously.
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, restrict the number of cars to
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to avoid congested traffic.
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