The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
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The data provided in the form of pie charts compare the reasons for cycling and driving to
work
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Overall
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, the main factors that cause people to choose to travel to
work
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by bicycle are keeping fit and reducing pollution.
In contrast
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, the vital reason to drive to the workplace is comforting. The first pie chart shows the importance of health and fitness and environmental issues are equally the same at 30% for people riding to
work
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. 15% of pupils tend to use bicycles to avoid problems relating to parking spaces.
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, being free and faster encourage less than 15% of the population to commute by bike. The second pie chart illustrates a sizeable amount of the population 40% driving to
work
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for comfort. Long distances forced 21% of people to travel by car.
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, less than 15% of the population go to
work
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by engine vehicles as they are safer, faster and sometimes as they need to carry some stuff by themself.
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