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Children as young as right own a mobile phone nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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In recent years, kids having their own telephones for several reasons. In my ,opinion I think having a mobile is completely a negative impact on our children.
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 would help them to learn. In
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 ,essay I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages and try to draw some conclusions. The first and foremost reason that I would like to explain is, giving a phone at the early stage of a little
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 is equal to destroying their life. Let's see how
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 is affecting our younger's life. Using mobiles frequently causes harm to the eyes. Nowadays 35% of kids are using spectacles. Getting addiction is the second major thing. Mothers are struggling a lot when feeding their little
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 . Because they need telephone even eating. And using a phone regularly can harm earning power.
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 study shows that in the next 50 years, Most people in the world are blind and deaf. The third major disadvantage is using mobile is
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 of the big barriers between
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 and child bonding. Children don't have time to spend with their
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 and the
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 too don't have the time to spend with their toddlers.
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, by using
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 new technology , kids are becoming more and more advanced. They are learning new things. They can improve their knowledge to some extent.
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 could lead our children as brilliant. To sum it up, Giving the telephone at a younger age have lots of disadvantages.
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 as eye problems, ear problems, depression and
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 bond breakage with
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, they can gain knowledge too. So the
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 should be very aware of
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. They have to maintain a balance between the usage of technical devices and their healthy lifestyle. Always they have to keep an eye on it.
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