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Band 7.5

You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take

Dear Maam, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I have been experiencing some issues regarding the dining table in our apartment. I am Anna Chee,one of your tenants and just recently moved into room number 303 which is located on the 7th floor of your unit. Let me explain my situation
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, I just found out that one of the dining table chairs was broken.My mother told me that it is not safe to use and it can be dangerous for children.
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,the nail of the chair is already removed and it can be a cause of injury when we sit it during every meal.
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, the aircon in my room is a bit noisy every time I turn it on and causes us difficulty sleeping at night. I would appreciate it if you could send someone to inspect the aircon and replace a new set of dining table on Monday at 2pm. Thank you and looking forward to your immediate action on
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 matter. Yours Faithfully Anna Chee

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greeting and closing
Consider starting with a more polite greeting, such as 'Dear [Landlord's Name]' if known, or 'Dear Sir/Madam'.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea more clearly. For instance, separate the issues with the furniture and the air conditioning into distinct paragraphs.
complete response
Include a more formal conclusion that reiterates your request for action in a courteous manner, to enhance professionalism.
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You did a good job introducing yourself and clearly stating the purpose of your letter.
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Your letter includes specific details about the problems, which provides clarity to the landlord.
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