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The table and pie chart show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.

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The table and pie chart show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.
The given table highlights information about the crowd of local
as well as
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 foreign learners in Australian institutes in 2001 and 2010
while
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 the prone pie chart displays data in a percentage format.
Overall
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, it can be seen that nine years later in 2010 most scholars signed up at these elite universities totally. Another striking point is that foreign trainees' numbers increased in a shocking way in comparison with native scholars. Looking at the details, in 2001 around 33,657 members of students were regional and Interestingly both genders had exactly the same percentage 43%
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 International pupils' swarms were low with 5,192 members; it means only 13% and their female and male portions were under ten. If we look at 2010,it is obvious that local
students
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 gangs increased to 39,488 members with 73% in the pie chart.
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, local gentlemen and ladies again had similar percentages 39% and 35% respectively.
In addition
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, the International trainees' crowd enhanced and reached 14,593 with over
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 which makes it clear that these groups' gender portions were under twenty per cent
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the number of
  • the total number of
  • research students
  • local students
  • international students
  • male students
  • female students
  • went up
  • rose
  • grew
  • increased to
  • fell to
  • made up
  • accounted for
  • the largest group
  • a smaller group
  • the gap between
  • compared with
  • in 2001
  • in 2010
  • over the period
  • from 2001 to 2010
  • there was a rise in
  • there was a fall in
  • remained the same
  • slightly
  • sharply
  • by contrast
  • while
  • overall
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