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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The graph illustrates mean monthly temperatures and
precipitation
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 in Kolkata.
Overall
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, the
temperature
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 in
kolkata
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Kolkata
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 has hit
the
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its
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 peak in the month of May,
whereas
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 the maximum rain has been recorded in July.
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, similar trends have been noticed in
temeprature
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temperature
 and
precipitation
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 in the month of January and December where both have hit an
all
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time
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 low.
Firstly
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, looking at the trends of
temperature
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 in the city of
Kolakata
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Kolkata
, we can see that the least
temperature
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 was noted in January
of
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 20 degrees
celcious
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celsius
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 which
has
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dramatically soared over the next four months and reached an
all
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time
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 high in May crossing 30
degree
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celcious
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celsius
, after which it has gradually dropped back to about 20 degrees
celcious
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celsius
 again in December.
On the other hand
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, Kolkata has
also
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 shown a similar trend to its mean temperatures, where the average rainfall recorded has shown an upward trend over the first seven months starting off with less than 25mm in January and reaching an
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time
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 high in the month of July at about 340mm. Soon after, from August onwards it
has
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declined which has become very significant from September onwards and
reaching
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 the lowest recorded
precipitation
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 in December. In conclusion, both
temperature
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 and
precipitation
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have
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started off the year
withan
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with
all
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time
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 low and peaked around the middle of the year and dropped back to
its
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intial
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initial
 value
in
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at
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 the
year
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year's
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 end.
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