Some people feel that it is necessary to test new medicines on animals, while other people feel that this is not fair on animals and not necessary. Discuss both views ad give your opinion.

Nowadays,
due to
continious
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continuous
improvements in the pharmacy sector, a lot of new and effective
medicines
are being invented, which
is
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not only limited to
human's
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human
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use but are used for
animals
aswell
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as well
.
However
, some people believe new pharmacies should be tested on
animals
,
whereas
others strongly disagree
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this
statement and consider it useless. In
this
essay, I will discuss both of these perspectives alongside will
also
give my opinion on why new
medicines
shall be allowed to test on
animals
.
To begin
with, we will see whether is there any need to test new
medicines
on
animals
?
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The answer is simply yes. Because we know if someone has to select between animal and human, they will
also
go for
humans
. So, in the same
way
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when new
medicines
are produced, rather than directly testing
it
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on
humans
and putting their life in danger it is good to test
it
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on
animals
instead
. In
this
way, we can have
idea
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an idea
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if the medicine is authentic or not and is okay to be used for
humans
or not.
For instance
, if we look at the famous Kashif Afiridi's research work, where he claimed his medicine can bring relief from your headache in 5 mins and when given to a 20 years adult, after a
while
the man was found dead in
washroom
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.
For
this
reason
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it is never recommended to experiment on
humans
directly, as
animals
should be prioritized before
in
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such
experiments to reduce the level of risk.
Furthermore
, those who disagree to perform
experiment
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on
animals
are
also
not wrong. As
animals
life are equally important to that of individuals.
Therefore
, before any experimentation
being
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performed it is the duty of
researcher
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the researcher
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to make sure his/her product is harmless and if any harm is done to
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the animal
an animal
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animal
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animals
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during experimentation
so
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they should be held responsible for it and heavily fined. If we take
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example of the
Austrailian
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Australian
researcher, how
becuase
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because
of his silly mistake
costed
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10 goats their lives. And later he was jailed for a year and
also
was liable to pay a hefty fine.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficacy
  • unethical
  • alternative methods
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • misleading conclusions
  • strict regulations
  • humane
  • moral concerns
  • advancements in technology
  • viable alternatives
  • phase out
  • medical research
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