It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?

Nowadays many individuals
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development because
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young thinking of how important
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profits
dependant life and creative ideas which allow them to be more specific about
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own ambition and my opinion is absolutely positive . Despite the earliest old generation
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their desire
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them and
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for the family requirements.
However
,
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running
a personal
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need more information and knowledge . The first reason for young generation
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prefer
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business
is that many of them
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join employee
program and they found underestimation for
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abilities in the organisation and
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creative personal activity and communication skills which does not apply to
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their
own dreams and
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business
which eventually
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up with abilities and knowledge. For
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instance
,
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technologist Mr.
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who
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started his road in primary health care but after as
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he found himself working in a chair running machines with technical abilities which he can rise
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up with
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business
which now includes many companies with different
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online and worldwide.
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, many
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of thinking on
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profits
and creativity which
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not allowed under the rules of
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organizational
employment. The opportunities of online marketing find
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its way
through people to spread
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their
product with
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expensive way to get easy money with
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efforts
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which allow them to live
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their
personal life
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and its a point of view which cannot be with
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governmental
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staffing .
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my opinion and based on many recent
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with
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young people building a
business
consider
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to be
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vital for them to build
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their
dream and at the same time to leave
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happily
happy
much more time and for
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I think the
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benefits
of
selfemployment
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self-employment
self employment
is much
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healthier
, knowledgeable and more creative aspiring others and am much positive
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than
its drawback .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aspiration
  • entrepreneur
  • flexibility
  • decision-making
  • financial rewards
  • personal fulfillment
  • challenges
  • financial risk
  • invested capital
  • cash flow
  • guaranteed income
  • work-life balance
  • responsibility
  • pressure
  • burnout
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