It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?
Nowadays many individuals
seeking
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seek
living
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to live
privatiely
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privately
business
development because many
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much
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are
profets
dependant life and creative ideas which allow them to be more specific about Correct your spelling
profits
thier
own ambition and my opinion is absolutely positive . Despite the earliest old generation Correct your spelling
their
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apply
working
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to work
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the organization
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a benefit
benefit
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beneficial
for
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apply
enough
for the family requirements. Add a missing verb
be enough
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, ruuning
a personal Correct your spelling
running
business
need more information and knowledge .
The first reason for young generation prefere
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prefer
prefers
business
is that many of them joing emploee
program and they found underestimation for Correct your spelling
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thier
abilities in the organisation and Correct your spelling
their
thier
creative personal activity and communication skills which does not apply to Correct your spelling
their
thier
own dreams and Correct your spelling
their
finally
they end up with resignation and running small
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a small
business
which eventually rise
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rises
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instance
labratory
technologist Mr.Correct your spelling
laboratory
mohamed
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Mohamed
who
started his road in primary health care but after as Correct pronoun usage
apply
technician
he found himself working in a chair running machines with technical abilities which he can rise Correct article usage
a technician
it
up with Correct pronoun usage
apply
own
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his own
business
which now includes many companies with different mode
online and worldwide.
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modes
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, many teneege
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teenage
way
of thinking on Change to a plural noun
ways
profets
and creativity which Correct your spelling
profits
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not allowed under the rules of Replace the word
it's
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orgnizational
employment. The opportunities of online marketing find Correct your spelling
organizational
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through people to spread Correct your spelling
its way
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product with Correct your spelling
their
less
expensive way to get easy money with Add an article
a less
less
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fewer
efforts
which allow them to live Fix the agreement mistake
effort
thier
personal life Correct your spelling
their
independent
and its a point of view which cannot be with Change the word
independently
govermental
staffing .
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governmental
government
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my opinion and based on many recent Change preposition
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experience
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experiences
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many
business
consider Correct pronoun usage
it to
to be
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being
thier
dream and at the same time to leave Correct your spelling
their
happely
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happily
happy
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benefits
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self-employment
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