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Some believe that history has little to teach us about today while others think that the study of the past helps us to understand the present. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #history #study
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believe
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 that
history
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not
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important
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of
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 our knowledge
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others
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people
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thin
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think
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 that learning
history
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 is necessary for us to understand what happened in the past. In
this
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dicuss
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discuss
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the advantages
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 and
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disadvantages
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 of
this
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 point of view. On the one hand, it is true that
history
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 is not the main subject in school that
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shows
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 how important is it. Nowadays,
people
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 prefer to learn more and more about math and technology to modern the world. It is
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clearly
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 that
history
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 is not as important as
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another caculate subject
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caculate
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calculated
 subject in school because it is all the past.
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,
history
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is not become
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 the main subject in school and
student
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students
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also
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not
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do not
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 need to have
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high score.
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, the benefit of learning
history
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helps
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help
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 us to understand clearly the past of our country. It
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also improves
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also
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 improve us to love and protect our country more than now.
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, it will be the motivation for
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the student
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student
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students
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 to study hard because they know how hard for our
ancestor
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ancestors
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 to have freedom and
peaceful
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. A study
of
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university
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find
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finds
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 out that more than half of
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percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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 who have
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 life
,
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 have a huge
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knowledge of
history
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 or what happened in the past. In my view,
leaning
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learning
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history
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 is necessary for us to have
a knowledge
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knowledge
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 about the past and
also
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 it is important for
people
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know
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to know
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 how hard
of
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apply
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our
ancestor
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ancestors
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to
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were to
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peace and freedom until now.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable lessons
  • insights
  • root causes
  • current problems
  • past mistakes
  • repeating
  • generations
  • informed decisions
  • irrelevant
  • unique
  • contemporary solutions
  • technological advancements
  • thorough understanding
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