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A growing number of people rely on restuarants and convenience food(frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?

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More and more people are eating out in restaurants and consuming ready-to-eat
food
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. The benefits of
this
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 are that individuals can save
time
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 and effort.
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,
this
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 trend could
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 cause health hazards, and
foods
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 served in restaurants or
ingredients
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 used in
convenience
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foods
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 are usually of low quality. The most evident benefit of ready-to-eat
food
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 is
convenience
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. In today’s hectic lifestyle, there is nothing better than having a ready meal. No matter how much physicians praise the advantages of a home-cooked meal,
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 of a hard day at the office, when individuals return home exhausted and hungry, canned soup or the cake with marshmallows can be a godsend.
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 the
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 one has to devote to the kitchen, preparing meals at home
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 requires an individual to make a trip to the local grocery shop to purchase the
ingredients
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 for the meal.
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, there is the added
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 and effort in peeling the vegetables and washing utensils. All
this
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 makes eating out in restaurants and consumption of
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food
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 an increasing and convenient trend.
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,
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 trend
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 confers several disadvantages. One drawback is that most
convenience
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 or restaurant
foods
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 are often rather unhygienic.
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 to say that these
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 contain a substantial amount of calories and fats,
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 causing various non-communicable diseases
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 as obesity, diabetes, and so on. Low quality is another major downside of
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foods
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. Cheap
foods
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 especially are being affected by low-quality
ingredients
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 so as to offer the cheapest price possible for consumers.
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,
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 the growing tendency of eating
convenience
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food
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 saves both
time
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 and energy,
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 becoming the answer to a fast pace of life, it is important to pay attention to the health hazard caused by high calories and low-quality
ingredients
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 of
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foods
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rely on
  • restuarants
  • convenience food
  • frozen food
  • packaged meals
  • home-cooked food
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • variety of choices
  • cooking skills
  • health concerns
  • lack of control over
  • ingredients
  • expensive
  • potential
  • overeating
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