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A growing number of people rely on restuarants and convenience food(frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?

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More and more people are eating out in restaurants and consuming ready-to-eat
food
. The benefits of
this
 are that individuals can save
time
 and effort.
However
,
this
 trend could
also
 cause health hazards, and
foods
 served in restaurants or
ingredients
 used in
convenience
foods
 are usually of low quality. The most evident benefit of ready-to-eat
food
 is
convenience
. In today’s hectic lifestyle, there is nothing better than having a ready meal. No matter how much physicians praise the advantages of a home-cooked meal,
at the end
 of a hard day at the office, when individuals return home exhausted and hungry, canned soup or the cake with marshmallows can be a godsend.
Besides
 the
time
 one has to devote to the kitchen, preparing meals at home
also
 requires an individual to make a trip to the local grocery shop to purchase the
ingredients
 for the meal.
Furthermore
, there is the added
time
 and effort in peeling the vegetables and washing utensils. All
this
 makes eating out in restaurants and consumption of
convenience
food
 an increasing and convenient trend.
On the other hand
,
this
 trend
also
 confers several disadvantages. One drawback is that most
convenience
 or restaurant
foods
 are often rather unhygienic.
That is
 to say that these
foods
 contain a substantial amount of calories and fats,
thus
 causing various non-communicable diseases
such
 as obesity, diabetes, and so on. Low quality is another major downside of
such
foods
. Cheap
foods
 especially are being affected by low-quality
ingredients
 so as to offer the cheapest price possible for consumers.
To conclude
,
while
 the growing tendency of eating
convenience
food
 saves both
time
 and energy,
therefore
 becoming the answer to a fast pace of life, it is important to pay attention to the health hazard caused by high calories and low-quality
ingredients
 of
such
foods
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rely on
  • restuarants
  • convenience food
  • frozen food
  • packaged meals
  • home-cooked food
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • variety of choices
  • cooking skills
  • health concerns
  • lack of control over
  • ingredients
  • expensive
  • potential
  • overeating
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