The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in Britain in 1991 and 2000

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The pie chart

compare

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the proportion of visitors who use the communal library and the reasons why they came to between 1991 and 2000.

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, it can be seen that most

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people

used public

library

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libraries

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to borrow or return

book

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books

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. It is

clearly

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that the percentage of

people

who came to public

library

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libraries

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to obtain information has a

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1991 to 2000.

Looing

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at the figure in

furthur

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detail, it is evident that the proportion of

speding

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spending

speeding

on visitors to

borrow

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return

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book

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was 65% in 1991 and

then

slightly decrease to 55% in 2000. It is

clearly

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that there was 15% of

people

who

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wanted

read

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newspaper

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or magazine.

These

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percentage had

went

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down to 5%. Turning to remain

statistic

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it is clear that

the rate of individuals who came to study sharply fell down to 2% after

started

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at 10%. Before there was 20% of

people

who wanted to obtain information, it started at 10% as same as visitors came to study. In 2000

has

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the new area of

people

who came to borrow or return videos accounted for 18%

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in Britain in 1991 and 2000

In some countries, many people do not have enough money to access the internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the internet?

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