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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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It is an uncomfortable truth that many criminals commit more illegal acts after they are released from
jail
. There are several causes to
this
 phenomenon
such
 as
lack
 of social support.
This
 essay will discuss what I believe to be the reasons for
this
 issue and suggest some solutions to mitigate
this
 problem. To embark on,
according to
 the Indonesian national report on crimes, more than half of
offenders
 committed the second and more crimes after serving the first punishment. There are a few reasons for
this
, one of them is a
lack
 of social support or social acceptance. When these
offenders
 came back from
jail
 and started their new lives in a community; they often find it hard to get a job because many employers refuse to hire them.
As a result
, they once again commit a robbery or shoplifting just to make ends meet. Another factor contributing to the high incidence of
second crime
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 among these ex-criminals is probably a
lack
 of education and practical skills. most of these
offenders
 do not have a degree, and they spent a huge amount of time in
jail
.
Therefore
, when they go out, there do not meet the criteria or
lack
 of skills required for employment.
However
, there are a few steps that can be taken by the government
as well as
 the community to reduce crime rates.
First,
there should be programs in
jail
 facilities to provide inmates with practical skills or job training so that when they finished their time in
jail
; they were able to make money and continue their lives. In conclusion, many
offenders
 commit more crimes after serving their time because the community could not accept them as a member of their society.
However
, the government could take a few steps to help these
offenders
 function in society
,
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 so that they would not have the chance to do another crime.
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