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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000
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The table below includes statistics about
change
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a change
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of
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in
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mode
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the mode
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 of travel in England for the time span of 15
year
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years
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 between
years
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the years
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 1985 till 2000.
Overall
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, there are 8 modes of travel shown in the table and the
distance
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 travelled by each
medias
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media
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or
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apply
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either decreased or increased after that specific time period.But
Total
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the Total
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distance
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 travelled by the sources increased in 2000 as compared to 1985 From the available data in the table, it is evident that more people
had
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travelled
through
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by
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cars
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car
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,
long
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long-distance
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distance
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 bus and taxis in
year
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the year
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 2000
compare
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compared
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 to 1985.
Distance
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 travelled by each of these modes increased by 1600
miles
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, 68
miles
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 and
by
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25
miles
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 respectively in
duration
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a duration
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 of 15 years.
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Similarly
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,Similarly
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 usage of other sources of travel like train has
also
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 increased during
this
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 interval
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,
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distance
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the distance
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 covered by Local Bus, bicycle and through walk decreased in the year 2000
compare
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compared
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 to 1985.
This
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 may be
due to
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 available of more comfortable and easy sources of travelling. Usage of local
bus
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buses
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 decreased by 103
miles
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,
bicycle
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bicycles
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 by 18
miles
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 and
distance
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 covered through walking by 18
miles
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