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the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
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This
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 provided chart illustrates three different kinds of telephone calls which were calculated by the total number of
minutes
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, in the UK from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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, it can be seen that two kinds of calls were performed by using a fixed line,
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 the
last
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 one was carried out by a mobile.
To begin
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, in 1995 local calls were the most popular because they made above 70 billion
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, which was a huge amount compared to others.
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 to that, local calls remained to increase slightly until they reached a peak, at 90 billion
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, in 1999,
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; they started to decline till they stood up, in 2002, at the same amount of
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 as it began. Regarding national and international calls , in 1995 people made around 37 million
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 of them. After, that these calls elevated gradually, and they stopped, at about 60 billion
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, in 2002. So, the difference between them and local calls reduced to be only 10 million
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.
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, in 1995 the using of mobiles to make calls was very low in comparison to others, at about 2 million
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, but its use rose slightly till a sudden increase, in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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