Many people use social media every day to keep in touch with friends and get social news. Do you think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages?

Some
people
argue that social
media
is very convenient for making friends and checking the latest
news
.
As a result
,
people
are spending that time much more than in the past. I strongly believe that
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lives are influenced by several social
media
such
as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram etc every day, all the time.
However
, the effects on
people
will not be good. Nowadays,
people
always use social
media
.
For example
, when they are used to making friends. They can meet friends from other countries and other
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country
areas. Because
,
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social
media
has
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no limit
for
country
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countries
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or
culture
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. The other
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reason
is that social
media
is only on the Internet.
That is
why
people
can
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communicate with many kinds of
people
everywhere,
such
as on the desk, in
cafe
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and in bed.
As a result
,
people
have
information
about many different cultures and new
news
in the world. It is very simple and easy.
On the other hand
,
news
and other
information
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taken by social
media
very easily. And, the
information
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it easy for anybody can make
news
and other
information
.
People
accept the
information
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no
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filter and
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not
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no
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affort
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afford
effort
. They do not know
that
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the
information
is true or fake. And
then
, the
information
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on
the
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social
media
.A few times later, the
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information
has
siginificatly
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significantly
increased. If the
information
of fake
news
will
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, the
news
would not
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that
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is fake or true. That will be made true by
people
.
Also
,
if
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people
will
be increase
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to meet
people
via the internet
by
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social
media
. It would be more difficult to meet
people
with
face
to
face
. Because
,
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people
do not have little experience
face
to
face
. In conclusion, as mentioned above, I think that social
media
has disadvantages.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • communication
  • connection
  • information
  • news
  • ideas
  • opinions
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • networking
  • career opportunities
  • community building
  • support
  • distraction
  • addiction
  • privacy concerns
  • risks
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • mental health
  • comparison
  • self-esteem
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