Many people use social media every day to keep in touch with friends and get social news. Do you think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages?

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argue that social
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is very convenient for making friends and checking the latest
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are spending that time much more than in the past. I strongly believe that
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lives are influenced by several social
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as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram etc every day, all the time.
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, the effects on
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will not be good. Nowadays,
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always use social
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, when they are used to making friends. They can meet friends from other countries and other
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or
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is only on the Internet.
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why
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communicate with many kinds of
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as on the desk, in
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and in bed.
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have
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about many different cultures and new
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in the world. It is very simple and easy.
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,
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taken by social
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very easily. And, the
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it easy for anybody can make
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and other
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the
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on
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social
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.A few times later, the
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is fake or true. That will be made true by
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to meet
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social
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. In conclusion, as mentioned above, I think that social
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has disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • communication
  • connection
  • information
  • news
  • ideas
  • opinions
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • networking
  • career opportunities
  • community building
  • support
  • distraction
  • addiction
  • privacy concerns
  • risks
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • mental health
  • comparison
  • self-esteem
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