Some people say that advertising has positive economic effects. Others think it has negative social effects because it will make people feel dissatisfied with who they are and what they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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advertising
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they have good
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economy
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effects
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. I strongly believe that
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advertising
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negative
effects
people
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and society. When it comes to positive
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people
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and they want to
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to new
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is it ".
The advertising
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help
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people
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finding
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, advertising increased consumption.
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watching the advertising
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thought that desire to buy the products.
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a result, that creates a beneficial economic cycle of selling and buying.
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,
people
spend money
for
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they buy unnecessary
things
who
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watching the
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advertising
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the advertising
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charming to the products.
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think that
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have
things
are not less charming than brand new
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me unhappy.
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, the advertising
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very perfect and nice view.
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is not
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world
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people
compre
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compare
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and advertising
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then
, their think that my life is bad and feel
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dissatisfied
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. that has positive
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effects
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. The mentioned above that I think
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negative
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more than positive
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advertising is very important in the social community, But, too much is not good. Information from advertising is able to very useful. If the advertising
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truth and
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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