The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The provided bar graph illustrates information about
among
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pupils of
school
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schools
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A and
B
who like subjects
in
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the percentage scale.
Overall
,
school
A's
students
seem to be interested indoor classes.
However
,
students
of
school
B
tend to play
sport
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outdoor
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. In detail, the
students
eight in ten of
school
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the school
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A
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favorite
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sport .
On the other hand
, the remaining four subjects preference
of
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under 20
percent
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per cent
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. Among them, drawing
class id
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specially
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dislike.
that is
nearly nine in ten
studentes
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students
dislike
subject
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the subject
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. And
favorite
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favorites
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of rate are Math and Science
for
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at
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10
percent
and about 20
percent
respectively. When it comes to
school
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B
pattern.
School
B
's pupils five in ten are the best
favorite
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subject of
drawing
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the drawing
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. And they
also
enjoy literature over 40
percent
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.
Also
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the most disliked class is
a
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science. That subject is
hate
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for
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by
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almost
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most
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students
.But, pupils
fovor
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favour
Math about 20
percent
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per cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, students, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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