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What do you think is the best way for the government of your country to improve the enviroment?

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In today’s society
environment
 has become a matter of significant concern.Scientists and journalists are discussing environmental problems and increasing
pollution
 in our world on television screen day by day.In my ,opinion our
government
 can make new regulations against increasing environmental
pollution
such
 as decreasing tax on electric powered
cars
moreover
 they can give low-interest credit who wants to invest in renewable
power
systems
. The foremost issue with the
environment
 is the increasing population.
This
 problem stems from fossil fuels
such
 as gas,petrol and coal.
This
 fossil
fuel
 is one of the major problems of environmental
pollution
.To decrease the consumption of
fuel
 fuels,
people
 should
use
 electric-powered
cars
.Some
people
 may not be fans of electric
power
cars
 but it will decrease
pollution
 in the long term other than
government
 can increase taxes who
use
 fossil
fuel
cars
 and decrease those who
use
 electric
power
cars
.
This
 regulation pushes
people
 to drop using fossil-
fuel
fuel
 car and encourage them to buy electric
power
cars
.
Furthermore
 thanks to our technology today we can create clean energy by using renewable
power
systems
such
 as wind and polar
power
systems
.These technology
systems
 are still developing but our
government
 can make a campaign and give
people
 low-interest credit and a grant who wants to invest in
this
 area.As a matter of ,fact
this
 type of campaign can be a huge impact on our country
moreover
 the fossil
fuel
power
 plants will be shut down in time and replaced with renewable
power
systems
 plants.
However
, increasing taxes who
use
 fossil car and the owners of
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fossil
power
 plant will not be fair if the
government
 want to change everything in the short term.To prevent
this
, the
government
 should announce at least ten years plan so that
people
 can arrange their budget and the economic impact will be the least. In conclusion,the problem associated with the
environment
 requires urgent attention.By adopting renewable energy
systems
 and electric
power
cars
, society can make significant towards resolving environmental
pollution
.
Consequently
, a more sustainable and positive future can be envisioned for the
environment
.
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