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In some countries, more peoplt the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

#countries #peoplt #history #house #people #research
Nowadays more
people
 show interest in their
place
 of
resident's
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 background.As a new trend,
this
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it's
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 causality
also
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and also
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suggests
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 some ways in order to make it done. To start with various
reasons
 behind
this
 tendency,
higher
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 level of awareness among
new
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the new
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 generation can play an important role. To clarify, young and
well educated
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people
 usually are more likely to be curious about historical subjects and when it comes to their
place
 of living,
this
curiousity
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curiosity
 will increase exponentially. Mainly because
the
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they
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 want to seek out
reprecussions
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repercussions
 involved in leaving the
place
 by previous owners, see if they can deal with
inevitably
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reasons
 they may face as well or they want to feel more connected with owners. Another probable reason is they may believe in luck, fortune or hearsay.
Consequently
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 they tend to scrutinize every
details
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 of
building
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the building
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 in order to restrain
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the possibilities
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possibilities
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possibility
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 of living under bad luck. There are some ways
people
 can find to pave
theri
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their
the
 way in that respect.
Firstly
 there is a chance of investigation among older
neighbors
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neighbours
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especially
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,especially
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 in remote areas or suburbs. Mainly because conventional
people
 are more likely to get to know each other
due to
 safety
reasons
 or they may simply want to make friends in
distance
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 areas. In urban areas and huge buildings
also
 there is a chance to question about building's history by asking for information from real
etates
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estate
 companies since
these information
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are
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 more likely to be mentioned in contracts.
To conclude
, various
reasons
 can elicit
people
's desire to wonder about their
place
 of
resident
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residence
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 history and asking for information from
neighbors
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neighbours
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 is one way
can
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that can
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 be beneficial in
this
 respect.
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