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Many people have jobs that involve working shifts (i.e. working at night). What are some of the problems that shift workers might face? What can be done to solve them?

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Several humans have occupation forces on still for a long
time
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 at
night
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,there are a lot of obstacles in
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time
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 like it’s difficult to spend more
time
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 with family especially if their kids,they will mess up their parents or go out with friends addition exhaust and lack sleeping ,the best a way to iron out the problem it is group ,the company or hospital doing change roles between employees
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 as each group two day a week maximum.
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 ,there are a huge percentage of children do not anything about their parents because of working at
night
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 as nurses suffering with
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 case
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 kids relate babysitters or have got with them accidents without knowledge of the family Of other problems stay away from occasions like weddings or birthdays or Christmas So exhaustion because a drink of big quantities of coffee to focus on working results negative on brain and heart health ,
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, appear studies to around 75% of employees in area medical and economic who working in late
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 suffer from a lot of diseases .
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,there is the exploitation of companies and hospitals pressure on employees in
time
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 working like taking enough comfort or vacation so should to be there is law employment more people and less stress on them with putting a few days for at
night
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 particular for parents and government secured rights protection these individuals ,
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 putting schedule for divide
time
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 between people,
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, in Germany,
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 position for ,nurses if they to want work long hours, will increase in salary. In conclusion,in many ,countries there are jobs at
night
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 and people face up many things that make life hard
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 families or families or animals because drop the
time
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 ,in my view should putting plants and laws by the government and
time
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 management between employ .
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