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The wealthy nations should assist the poorer nations with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

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Developed
countries
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 ought to serve under-developed ones in case of natural catastrophic conditions. I wholeheartedly agree with
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 statement as rich
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 have enough funds to facilitate people in need. Natural tragedies
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 as floods, drought and tornadoes may bring outcry among the dwellers and if they get help from foreign
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 in the form of food, medical care and monetary help,
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 assistance can save thousands of lives. In
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 cases, helping
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 get accolades all across the world and their reputation
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 gets improved which can bring fetch more business for those
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.
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, Canada helped the Turkish Government with funds when Turkey had a horrible earthquake resulting in a better image of Canadian authorities in the world.
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, it is a win-win situation for both developed and underdeveloped
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. Adding to it, helping one during one's bad times promotes harmony and it can be helpful in bringing peace across the globe. To be more specific, when a country is suffering from natural calamity, it receives support from an affluent country, which would strengthen its ties, and its bond of friendship will be stronger than ever.
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, the probability of war between
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countries
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 will be quite low which is a positive sign for promoting brotherhood around the globe.
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, human is a social animal and needs help from each other to live with peace and joy. The same phenomenon is
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 applicable to rich
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 to provide a supporting hand to poor ones so that their citizens can come out from those emergency situations quickly and can lead a normal life.
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