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Some people say that ebook and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspapers and magazines. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #ebook #technology #newspapers #magazines
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 the advent
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 modern technology,
people
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aware
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about
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 the latest
news
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from
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 a single click. It is
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 issue that
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 invention would replace the paper form. I strongly agree that newspapers and magazines will be faded out
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 the online availability of
news
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. I discuss the reasons to point out my argument. The first and foremost reason is that e-
news
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are
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 convenient for the
people
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.
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 the invention of technology, readers can read the
news
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 at anytime and anywhere around the world. It needs only a spark of time to spread the
news
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.
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,
people
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 on conventional
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 have to wait hours to read the
news
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. So, I believe paper
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 of
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on
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 the verge of extinction.
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, in order to make the papers, trees have to be cut off and it leads to lots of environmental issues
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as loss
 of natural habitats of animals, carbon dioxide emissions etc.
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 issues change the mindset of
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.
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, the use of newspapers is a part of lifestyles among a fair amount of
people
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especially
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 the older generation. That means, reading
newspaper
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a newspaper
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 with a cup of tea makes the day more fruitful.
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 truth cannot be neglectable. In conclusion, modern technology has made lots of impacts
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 the reading habits of
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 and it directs the light to change the medium of
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 reading. It will flourish in the future and will lead to the extinction of hard forms of paper.
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