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Describe a toy you liked in your childhood.You should say: What kind of toy it is When you received it How you played it And how you felt about it

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I've loved cooking since I was a child, so the first
toy
 I had was a tiny cooking
toy
. Children usually believe that if you put your wish slip under your pillow before Christmas Eve, your wish will come true. At that time, I believe that too. So I wrote down my wish on a piece of paper, my wish was a tiny cooking
toy
 that was very popular at
this
 time. The next day, I actually got that
toy
. My
parents
 said that Santa gave me a present, but I knew it was a gift my
parents
 secretly bought for me. That
toy
 is used as a regular cooking set, only that it is smaller. I cooked a lot of tiny food with that
toy
. That gift made me feel how much my
parents
 loved me, it shielded me closer to my
parents
.
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