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Online education is becoming increasingly popular. Many university students are choosing to study online instead of face to face. Do the advantages of distance education outweigh disadvantages?

#education #university #students #study #face #distance
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 has transformed our lives in many ways. Online education is one of the good examples. It comes with
benefits
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the benefits
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 of reducing travelling
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,
opportunities
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and opportunities
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 to do international courses. On the
down side
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downside
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,
students
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 can feel isolated and it prevents them from bonding with other
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 meaningfully. In
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 we will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of online learning. The biggest convenience internet brings is
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connectivity and
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time
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. When it comes to online learning,
students
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 can learn from home and
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 saves up a significant portion of
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 for travelling.
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 allows
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 to have more
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 and use
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other productive tasks.
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, online learning opens the door
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possibility
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the possibility
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 for
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 to do courses
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 conducted in
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another country
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 without having to present physically.
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 is particularly helpful for working adults who continue learning about their profession which the course is often offered in other countries. With
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 the working adult can juggle their day job and learning concurrently. In terms of disadvantageous, without meeting each other face-to-face,
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 often feel they are on their own in
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 learning journey. They feel isolated and
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 can be detrimental to their learning motivation.
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, it is extremely challenging for
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 to form meaningful
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. Being together means
students
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 can interact, conduct group discussions or have lunch together which allows them to understand each other better.
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 helps the
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 to form a better sense of camaraderie as well. In conclusion, there’s always two sides of a coin. In my opinion, the
advantageous
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 of online learning far
outweighs
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 its disadvantageous and it will only continue to be more common to do online learning.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • E-learning platforms
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Traditional education
  • Digital resources
  • Self-paced learning
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Blended learning
  • Technological infrastructure
  • Student engagement
  • Time management
  • Cost-effective
  • Geographical barriers
  • Networking opportunities
  • Face-to-face interaction
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