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Men and women employed in full-time jobs have to share evenly household chores and caring for children at home. Do you agree or dissagree?

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Today in
this
 world it is all about equality and being independent; so why not take responsibility for the upbringing of the child and do the chores in a similar way by both parents?To break down the taboo the couple should equally support each other.
This
 essay will see the merits in detail. In
this
 cutthroat ,competition it becomes necessary for parents to work and earn.It becomes hard after doing a 9-5 job for a mother to come back home tired and cook or attend to the toddler.At
this
 ,stage it is a crucial role of a father to help in the best way. It is
also
 possible to say that the duties must be divided so that they can get quality family time.One good illustration of
this
 is a working husband and wife staying in a metro city have to help each other or else it becomes a burden on any single parent.
Additionally
 , the duties should be distributed in
such
 a way that it becomes easy for the duo to finish off the work.
While
 it is true in terms of earning or succeeding in life when one of the partners needs support on the same hand it goes with personal life as well.It may happen sometimes both of them may have quarrels about keeping the house clean or how to raise a child but avoiding the circumstances should be the pillar and deal with the situation. To sum it up , I agree with the fact that it is essential for both mother and father to act as a partner and behave
accordingly
while
 helping each other in all the ways possible and setting a good example happy family by looking after one another.
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