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Some people think residents should keep their streets clean and tidy while others sy it is government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #residents #streets #sy #government’s #responsibility
Road
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The road
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 system
are
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is
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 one of the reasons, the development of the nation
depend
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on
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. It is believed by some that its cleanliness is the responsibility of the
people
 residents
whereas
 others believe that
government
 is the only one responsible for it. I believe that it is the duty of both the individual and the authority to maintain the hygiene and tidiness of the country.
This
 essay will highlight both
the
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views in detail. On the one hand, the
people
 who reside in the
area
 can keep the
streets
 in front of their homes or shops clean by taking initiatives
such
 as putting garbage bins, sweeping and encouraging other
people
 to do so.
This
 will keep them healthy and will reduce
the
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pollution to some extent.
For example
, the
people
 of a society in Amritsar
along with
 their children fixed a day
in
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a week for cleaning the roads of the society,
since
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and since
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then
 the health and the environment of that
area
has
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have
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 been better.
Thus
, it is always beneficial to maintain the hygiene of our
surrounding
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surroundings
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 to keep
the
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diseases away.
On the other hand
, it is the duty of
government
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the government
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 to maintain
their
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its
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authorize
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area
. They can do so by enforcing laws related to tidiness and taking fine from
people
 who throw their garbage in the
streets
. They can
also
 encourage and inspire
people
of
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 the
area
 to keep the
streets
 clean by taking specific measures.
For instance
,
government
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the government
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 of Delhi hired hundreds of cleaning workers to clean the roads of the capital.
To conclude
,
government
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the government
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 and the individual are responsible for maintaining their
streets
 for the betterment
on
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of
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 one’s health and environment of the surrounding, which proves the fact that cleanliness is the key to
keep
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keeping
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the
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apply
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diseases away.
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