Some people say patriotism causes problems and is negative overall. Others feel that it is beneficial for society at large. Do the advantages of patriotism outweigh its disadvantages?

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A group of

society

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believe that some of the most serious problems are rooted in patriotism

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there exists another group who think

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issue can bring pretty much benefits for their

nation

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. From an

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perspective, there were numerous advantages and disadvantages to being a patriot. As far as I am concerned the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. Obviously, all of the

people

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in any

country

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have feelings for their

nation

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but patriots are some steps forward in comparison to the others. In some aspects,

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society

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beneficial, like being super active in their office or at work.

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kind of men who believe in their work and

country

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can bring an astonishing fate for their

people

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and government. A real lover not only is a hard worker but

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very emotional for his

nation

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's future. For a little example, my father when he was just 13 years old joined the military just for the defence of his

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's region.

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of what was mentioned in the previous paragraph,not once could find a normal person who worries about his

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. Most ordinary individuals are

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selfish and just try to be successful

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who want all of the money in the world. But

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group is much better than fake patriots, who do horrible actions like executing humans in the name of patriotism and putting the

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in destruction way. By way of example, my uncle was an ordinary man who just worked for his family and did even not hurt an individual but my manager by the name of a real Patriot destroyed all of the lands that

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to rural

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, being a

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lover is worthy in some aspects but if being a true lover. To put it in a nutshell, patriotism by itself not only is not harmful but

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can be beneficial for

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due to

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the reasons which were put forward in the above paragraphs.

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task response

Ensure that the essay responds fully to the question prompt, addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of patriotism in a balanced manner.

coherence cohesion

Focus on organizing ideas and presenting them in a logical sequence. Use transitional words and phrases to improve coherence and cohesion.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

Introduction
Body paragraph 1 – Problems
Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

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A possible solution to this problem would be...
One immediate practical solution is to...

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

327 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

fosters
sense of belonging
strengthening societal bonds
instills
pride and loyalty
excessive
nationalism
intolerance
discrimination
conflict
blind allegiance
flawed policies
unifying force
crisis
manipulated
political leaders
division
advocating
responsibility
civic duty
engaged
informed citizenship
balanced and inclusive
cultural diversity
marginalize
minority groups
stifle dissent

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