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Formal examination has become the most common way to assessing a student's performance. Do you think it's a positive or negative development, in your view?

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A Formal examination is utilized by various educational institutions to access the calibre of
students
 and assign them a performance grade.
Although
, it's
a
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traditional
but
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it is the most acceptable
approach
 in schools and colleges. I agree with the view of conducting formal examinations.
Firstly
, The written exams will ensure that kids memorise the topics which will be very important for them in the near future.
This
approach
 will help
students
 to have better vocabulary and improve their writing skills.
For instance
, young kids who are
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 the cusp of learning new things will benefit from
this
approach
 as
this
 will help them develop and become better at their communication.
Students
 will put an effort to better understand the topics before they can byheart it and
this
 will help them to apply the theory in the real world.
Secondly
, the institution can select the right
students
 for their course
in addition
 to that
this
 will help them take the best talent out of a large candidate pool. Certain degrees,
for instance
, Engineering and Master's are not everyone's cup of tea and selecting the wrong
students
 would damage the reputation of the college.
This
 will
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 affect the future of the student studying the wrong course. I would conclude
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 that , I am with the traditional
approach
 of
writting
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 the exam because it will help
students
 remember important knowledge, which will help them for a
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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