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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Punishment
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 should be strict and powerful and it should reduce the crime rate. In Morden world, there is an increase in criminal activity and the authorities should make strict laws and act to reduce the percentage of illegal crimes. I agree that for a good
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 the government should make capital
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 a major law. Admittedly, one of the main reasons behind
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 a grave issue might be the raising number of illegal
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.
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, people are scared to live in
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 bad ecosystem where lots of illegal activity occurred
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 as drugs, kidnapping and murders.
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, in USA the criminal
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 are increasing nowadays which creates risks for humans Probing ahead, the government should make a strict law to control these
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, some populations suggest the authorities make capital
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 for culprits to make a good society.
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, the death sentence is the prime action to reduce the crime rates and make society a crime-free area. To vindicate according, to Forbes magazine it is mentioned that in Arab countries they follow the death sentence to reduce the crime. Despite
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, it is a measure to be implemented in the law to create a livelihood place for humans in the nation.
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, I agree that it is the main goal to be added to the constitution of the nation to reduce illegal
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 the arguments mentioned above one can reach the logical conclusion that the benefits of capital
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 are indeed too great to ignore.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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