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The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, there has been a significant surge in the prevalence of low-cost
airlines
 which allow various choices for
visitors
 to travel.
While
 some
people
 think that
this
 change provides many benefits to a lot of
people
, others argue that there are some downsides to
this
 issue. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that low-cost
airlines
 come with various benefits for many
people
 around the world.
Firstly
, because of
lower
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of
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flight
ticket
price
, it offers opportunities for
wide
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 range of
people
in
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 different financial status to travel abroad, which support many individuals who would like to bring their family or lover to visit another country during their vacation.
Moreover
, increasing
of
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visitors
 may result in economic growth since many
traveling
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 locations will propel their business to attract
visitors
such
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as Pattaya city in Thailand
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 arrange various events during
Songkran
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 festival for foreigners.
On the other hand
, there are some downsides for customers who take a low-cost airline. Since the
ticket
price
 is lower , the airline may provide lower quality of service to their customers
such
 as an uncomfortable seat or reduced quality of food during flying.
Furthermore
, it is possible to have overcrowding problems since the
price
 is affordable for a wide range of
travelers
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. In my opinion,
while
 low-cost
airlines
 may have
high
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 potential
facing
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 a lower quality of service ,
lower
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price
 that they offer may support many
people
 who cannot afford a higher
ticket
price
 . In conclusion,
while
 those who think that gaining
of
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low-cost
airlines
 have many drawbacks, I strongly believe that there are many advantages since the
ticket
 for
this airline
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 are affordable for more
people
 which
is
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not only help them to travel abroad with their family
,
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 but
also
 drive the economic growth in many countries because of increasing of
visitors
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Affordability
  • Global mobility
  • Convenience
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic benefits
  • Cultural exchange
  • Enhanced connectivity
  • Drawbacks
  • Sustainable travel
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