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What invention in the last 30 years has made the most difference in the lives of people? Explain why it has had such a noteworthy effect. Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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Many
inventions
 made a difference in the lives of people in the
last
 30 years. Mobile
phones
 and
wifi
 are the most innovative examples among them. Certain changes can be seen in the
lifestyle
 because of
phones
 and
wifi
. We shall discuss the effect of these
inventions
further
 in the essay.
To begin
, Invention is the mother of necessity.
Phones
 were invented to resolve the problem of communication between army personnel and later they are being used as a public communication medium.
Phones
 made a dramatic change in
human
Correct article usage
the human
show examples
lifestyle
 .
For instance
, nowadays talking with a friend and family is a common and daily routine. People can't imagine life without a phone. My friend had an emergency and immediately made a call to me for help, I reached him in a few days and minutes and take him to the hospital which saved his life. Any delay would have a big loss of phone helped to save. I strongly support the use of
phones
 and admit has changed lives.
Secondly
, I am amazed by the invention of
wifi
. Amazing technology connected every human with each other with just a single tap away. One couldn't have thought of
such
inventions
 a few years ago where people can talk and see one another in real-time no matter how far away they are.
For example
, my friend's mother was not well and he was getting curious about their health. I made a video call and when he saw them recovering well, he become relaxed.
Moreover
, the Internet offers you the availability of any kind of information you need. Phone and Internet /
wifi
 changed the working style and
lifestyle
 altogether. In conclusion, As discussed above and examples show that the Internet and
phones
 changed our lives and
lifestyle
. I strongly appreciate these
inventions
.
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